Thread:Wiki Restoration Committee/@comment-31720212-20200104024544/@comment-27031093-20200109215814

Popping in to say that I'm slowly but surely going through the script.

Some (very) early observations:

- Jenna literally refers to Arcy as her younger cousin on page0005 (あの子 私の従姉妹な). While this obviously conflicts with Arcy being an Apostle, there's no ambiguity about their relation in the line itself.

- Tina has the same last name (リンクル) as Millie from the Rance games. Since they're both weapon shop clerks, it's likely deliberate. While it remains to be seen how the name will be officially translated, both Rance 03's romanized names and the wiki use "Lincle".

- Kentarou introduces himself and Miki on page0010 with their last names first, but they are otherwise always referred to by their first names first throughout the script.

- Sugar says that she just turned e instead of 18 on page0012.

- Jenna should say "wants" instead of "want" at the bottom of page0029.

- On page0030 there should be an "in" in the line "Miki shoved it Masumi's face."

- During Kentarou's battle with the snake-man on page0037 it should say "It looked strong, but its reactions were slow." instead of "its reactions were strong."

As always, great work! I'll keep looking it over, but I see no reason not to release it as is; you can always make a patch with alterations later. If my nitpicky observations weren't obvious, the overall script is coherent (as coherent as it can be, at least), so I wouldn't worry about the game being made any harder than it already is by your translation.